Excerpt from Moons' Kiss:
The final repetition came out as a whoosh, as if the breath had been knocked from his chest. He desperately wished her gone.
She said something, so heavily slurred that it took a minute to realize she'd spoken in his language.
He threw an arm over his eyes to hide the tears that broke free even as he choked with laughter. It was a frightening sensation, as though the final strings of sanity had snapped. By the time she touched his shoulder, pain, mirth, and hope all felt like despair and her touch had no power to draw him back.
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I have no idea what's going on, but I want to know. Good share!!
ReplyDeleteThat you want to know is high compliment indeed. Thanks so much, Sidney. Have a great Memorial Day weekend.
ReplyDeleteHe's seems to be in a really low place. Poor guy. Great six. :)
ReplyDeleteSo many emotions in this 6, all deeply felt! Great 6!
ReplyDeleteWow! Love your 6! His emotions come through so vividly. :)
ReplyDeleteVery emotional and powerful six! Great to meet another Comeau, too :) My family was originally Comeau before they added the "x" waaaay back in the day.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad that his emotional delicacy came through without being sappy. Of all my characters, he was the hardest, the most challenging to write. Thank you all for your reactions. Your replies are invaluable. Without reader feedback, we can't know that we achieved our writing goal(s).
ReplyDelete"The final strings of sanity had snapped" was a well-written line and letting the reader know a little more about the character. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Mrs. Wildcat.
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